Date: 4.05.15
SPEED WRITE
HAVE YOU EVER WONDERED ABOUT THE GREAT MYSTERIES OF STARS?
[Introduction]
Stars in space are really fun to learn about them. In this information report. I would be writing about stars appearance and types of stars and also the life cycle of the stars. Also Stars are really interesting to learn about.
[Types of Stars]
Stars can be gigantic or small and also like a sun. Hot stars are brighter than the others. The sun is a gas dwarf star because it is boiling hot. As stars begin to die they become giants and supergiants and that's why we can’t really see them. Little stars are much easier to see because the shine from the sun reflecting light.
[Life cycle of Stars]
A newborn Star is called a Nebulae because it is a clump of gas and dust. After a Nebulae the star is either a Neutron star or a giant star. Stars are supergiant and that means that the Supergiant star is slightly darker. The last step of a star is that it turns into a black hole.
[appearance]
Some stars appearance is really different to others. Did you also know that Sirius the brightest star is the first star you would ever see. Why do you think stars twinkle? Because when we look at the sky, we can see thousands of stars and you get confused because the all are shining.
[Conclusion]
This great journey comes to an end. Stars are the best and coolest research you could do. If you want more facts and information your most welcome to visit this website: http://www.sciencekids.co.nz/sciencefacts/space/stars.html
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Kia ora Shahid,
ReplyDeleteWow! What an amazing heading for your information report Shahid! :)
Your next learning steps are:
1) Writing more factual information. An information report must give others information about a certain topic and this is why it needs to be factual and not opinion-based.
2) You need to proofread your work and correct any errors to further improve your work and make sure that your paragraphs make sense. I suggest you read your writing aloud and see which parts don't really make sense.
Bonjour Shahid,
ReplyDeleteI love your writing about the stars. You have a clear title about what the information is about and you used long sentences and short sentences. I still havn't mastered using short sentences and long sentences. Anyways, ka pai on doing a great job on your writing.
From Simeon