In Week 6 of Term 2 our class focused on how to write great explanations. We wrote about the Moon’s different phases as we are in the middle of learning about Planet Earth and Beyond. Learning how to write a great explanation will help us with our self-guided topics in a few weeks time. Here is my writing, after I have self-assessed and peer-assessed my work.
Title: WHAT IF THE MOON WAS UPSIDE DOWN…?
Introduction:
The great asteroid (the Moon) has eight different lunar phases that change every night. WHAT!
If you want to know more about the the great moon, read on.
Moon’s orbit around the Earth:
While the Moon revolves the Earth, we see further more or less of the illuminated side. Also the Earth is orbiting the sun at the same time that the moon is orbiting the Earth. Also people truly believe that the Moon’s phases are shadows but actually the sun reflects light onto the Moon.
Phases of the Moon:
Secondly, The Moon has eight different phase. That are Waxing Crescent, New Moon, First Quarter, Waxing Gibbous, Waning crescent, Waning Gibbous, Last Quarter and Full Moon. These are the phases that the Moon has. Meanwhile a cool fact is that the Moon is actually a asteroid.
Time management of the Moon:
The Management is really important to the Moon. This would help the Moon’s phases that come out every night. Thirdly, the Moon managment would help while the Earth orbits the Moon and the Moon orbits the Sun. Lastly the Moon’s management is actually really confusing and those eight phases are really important.
Conclusion:
Now this journey come to an end. I hope this explanation inspires you to write your own. Also cool fact is that the Moon is actually a asteroid. If you would like to visit this website check out the link: http://www.sciencekids.co.nz/sciencefacts/space/moon.html
My Information Report Success Criteria:
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Mālo e lelei Shahid,
ReplyDeleteThank you for sharing your learning about the Moon, it was a pleasure to read.
Your next learning steps:
1) Make sure that your paragraphs are well sequenced and the facts are in order. For example, with the phases of the Moon, it would have been more clear if you talked about the different phases in order from the new moon to the next moon.
2) Reading over your work and making sure it makes sense. Some of the information was not very accurate (like time management being important to the Moon..?) Proofreading is an important part of writing and will help you to become a better writer in the future.