TITTLE: HAVE YOU EVER WONDERED WHY MARS IS SO DANGEROUS...
Introduction:
Have you ever wondered why people don’t live on Mars.
Well today i’m going to tell you lots about Mars the planet.
These paragraphs are going to tell you surface features, could humans live on Mars,
Humans Exploration of Mars.
Surface Features:
Mars looks hot in the inside but actually it is cold in Mars. Suddenly Mars has no carbon dioxide also Mars is really dry it’s like a desert with volcanos. Mars has the biggest volcano in our solar system known. Mars has a really thin atmosphere that is why it causes to be cold.
Could Humans live on Mars?:
Humans can’t live on Mars , Mars is an uninhabitable planet because it is very cold and not much except volcanos. Also there is only a little bit of oxygen and not one person has been on Mars. If people go to Mars then they could get skin cancer because there is not much in Mars except volcanos. Mars has dust-storms that could last for a month or two.
Humans Exploration Of Mars:
Mars is thousands of kilometers away and space crafts wouldn't have enough fuel. Although Mars has a really thin atmosphere that is why it’s very cold.
Earth to Mars takes about 1.6 years and roughy 260 days that would be very long. Most importantly, since January 2004, the robotic rovers opportunity and spirits have been trekking around Mars to get more identification of Mars. Mars has slots of rover still over there.
Conclusion:
I hope you now know more identification about Mars, our closest neighbor. Also if you want some
I hope you now know more identification about Mars, our closest neighbor. Also if you want some
more key ideas then visit this website: http://www.planetsforkids.org/planet-mars.html. I hope this information report encouraged you to write your own.
Namaste Shahid,
ReplyDeleteYou've included some interesting facts about Mars - and I can see you're trying to build your vocabulary by using technical words and higher level descriptive words.
In terms of your Writing, your next steps are:
1) To consistently write clear paragraphs with a topic sentence and supporting information - about 1 topic!
2) Write different types of sentences - not all running on (i.e. too long!)
On another note, Shahid, I think you are ready to Bling Your Blog! What do you think?
ReplyDeleteThank you Mrs Kingston,
DeleteWhat am I going to do that by: I am going to write paragraphs of something appropriate and my mum or dad would check and that way I can practice.
I think I am ready to bling my blog Mrs Kingston.
By Shahid