Quad Blogging Comment To Paerata School

Greetings,
This is my recent comment to Paerata School.
In Hay Park School we have recently been doing something called quad blogging. Which is we comment on schools depending what schools there are and what week it is we take turns for a week to comment or you reply to comments.

Second draft of: HAVE YOU EVER WONDERED ABOUT THE GREAT MYSTERIES OF STARS?

HAVE YOU EVER WONDERED ABOUT THE GREAT MYSTERIES OF STARS?

[Introduction]

Stars in space are really fun to learn about them. In this information report. I would be writing about stars appearance and types of stars and also the life cycle of the stars. Also Stars are really interesting to learn about.

[Types of Stars]

Stars can be big or small also hot stars are brighter than the others. The sun is a gas dwarf star because it is boiling hot. As stars begin to die they become giants and super giants and that's why we can’t really see them. Little stars are much easier to see because the shine from the reflecting light.

[Life cycle of Stars]

A newborn Star is called a Nebulae because it is a clump of gas and dust. After a Nebulae the star is either a Neutron star or a giant star. Stars are super giant and that means that the super giant stars are slightly darker. The last step of a star is that it turns into a black hole.

[Appearance]

Some stars appearance is really different to others. Did you also know that Sirius the brightest star is the first star you would see. Why do you think stars twinkle? Because when we look at the sky, we can see thousands of stars and you get confused because the all are shining.

[Conclusion]

This great journey comes to an end. Stars are the best and great research about. If you want more  facts and information your most welcome to visit this website:  http://www.sciencekids.co.nz/sciencefacts/space/stars.html

HAVE YOU EVER WONDERED ABOUT THE GREAT MYSTERIES OF STARS?

Date: 4.05.15

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HAVE YOU EVER WONDERED ABOUT THE GREAT MYSTERIES OF STARS?

[Introduction]

Stars in space are really fun to learn about them. In this information report. I would be writing about stars appearance and types of stars and also the life cycle of the stars. Also Stars are really interesting to learn about.

[Types of Stars]

Stars can be gigantic or small and also like a sun. Hot stars are brighter than the others. The sun is a gas dwarf star because it is boiling hot. As stars begin to die they become giants and supergiants and that's why we can’t really see them. Little stars are much easier to see because the shine from the sun reflecting light.

[Life cycle of Stars]

A newborn Star is called a Nebulae because it is a clump of gas and dust. After a Nebulae the star is either a Neutron star or a giant star. Stars are supergiant and that means that the Supergiant star is slightly darker. The last step of a star is that it turns into a black hole.

[appearance]

Some stars appearance is really different to others. Did you also know that Sirius the brightest star is the first star you would ever see. Why do you think stars twinkle? Because when we look at the sky, we can see thousands of stars and you get confused because the all are shining.

[Conclusion]

This great journey comes to an end. Stars are the best and coolest research you could do. If you want more  facts and information your most welcome to visit this website:  http://www.sciencekids.co.nz/sciencefacts/space/stars.html

My Information Report Success Criteria:	Self	Peer
My heading/title:
is an interesting title (I might have phrased the title as a question.)	YES	YES
My opening paragraph/introduction:
says what my report is about in a clear way	YES	YES
gives a general “classification” – and maybe a technical classification	YES	YES
outlines the main features of the subject	YES	YES
My main paragraphs/body paragraphs:
have clear topic sentences  (topic and main point)	YES	YES
are organised so that each paragraph is about a different aspect of the subject	YES	YES
give detailed information (factual descriptions)	YES	YES
include specific, technical vocabulary	YES	YES
are generally balanced (have a similar amount of detail about the different aspects I write about)	YES	YES
may have helpful: tables, pictures and/or diagrams to add information	Yes	Yes
My end paragraph/conclusion:
draws the report together/sums up my main points	Yes	Yes
may give a personal opinion; ask the reader a question and/or tell the reader where further information may be found	Yes	Yes